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Life is a road trip. We all start off somewhere with our own vehicle. Maybe it's an expensive car, one of those recent models that are all the rage lately. Maybe it's an affordable one: cost-efficient and doesn't take much maintenance. Anyway, everyone starts off in a different car. Can't forget other people though--they're the ones driving at first. You're just a passenger. You'll take up the wheel eventually (or, you know, not).
So, off you go. But wait--aren't you forgetting something? Like, maybe, where you're going? Eh. It might not really matter. Some people have a definite place they want to go. Others don't. It's up to you whether or not the destination matters. Some people just take the trip for fun. Those people usually go slow just to enjoy the trip. Those who go fast just want to get wherever they're going. They should be careful in places with lots of people though; the roads might be congested. Maybe it's rush hour?
You'll be going on a lot of road stops. Gotta take care of yourself after all. And let's not forget that your car needs gasoline. Eventually, you might want to get your own car, maybe trade up. Maybe something flashy and in style so people will turn their heads when you get to your destination. Maybe you want an antique, old and outdated but still valuable nonetheless. In the end, all you really need is a car that'll get you to wherever you're going.
So, off you go. But wait--aren't you forgetting something? Like, maybe, where you're going? Eh. It might not really matter. Some people have a definite place they want to go. Others don't. It's up to you whether or not the destination matters. Some people just take the trip for fun. Those people usually go slow just to enjoy the trip. Those who go fast just want to get wherever they're going. They should be careful in places with lots of people though; the roads might be congested. Maybe it's rush hour?
You'll be going on a lot of road stops. Gotta take care of yourself after all. And let's not forget that your car needs gasoline. Eventually, you might want to get your own car, maybe trade up. Maybe something flashy and in style so people will turn their heads when you get to your destination. Maybe you want an antique, old and outdated but still valuable nonetheless. In the end, all you really need is a car that'll get you to wherever you're going.
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My entry for 's More Metaphor, Please workshop.
It's a bit common, I know.
Not that good in my opinion, but I can't seem to come up with anything better at the moment.
Extended Metaphor is 'Life is a Road Trip'. I seem to have added the metaphor of 'A Lifestyle is a Car' too though. I actually wanted to change my extended metaphor into that but I found it too hard to write.
Had a hard time trying to compress what I wanted to say.
My entry for 's More Metaphor, Please workshop.
It's a bit common, I know.
Not that good in my opinion, but I can't seem to come up with anything better at the moment.
Extended Metaphor is 'Life is a Road Trip'. I seem to have added the metaphor of 'A Lifestyle is a Car' too though. I actually wanted to change my extended metaphor into that but I found it too hard to write.
Had a hard time trying to compress what I wanted to say.
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Hey, it's a good metaphor! The theme is an interesting one.
But for critique sake, I'll write my mind about it.
I think its a bit too simple. Its written almost in circles. You could have organized the ideas in a structured way making the prime idea develop until a conclusion, using exactly the same sentences, maybe taking a few redundant ones out, and using that space to explain or grow the others.
Congrats anyway
But for critique sake, I'll write my mind about it.
I think its a bit too simple. Its written almost in circles. You could have organized the ideas in a structured way making the prime idea develop until a conclusion, using exactly the same sentences, maybe taking a few redundant ones out, and using that space to explain or grow the others.
Congrats anyway